Pride & Prejudice Essay Critique

I found the comments on my essay very helpful. I've realized that I need to proof read multiple times to make sure that my punctuation is correct and that my sentences are clear and consice. I see that my claims and ideas can be overshadowed and not understood due to some wordiness and unclarity. In addition, my thesis claim needs to be more in depth and have more of a narrow concept to tackle throughout my essay. I do, however, think that my paragraphs stayed on track in reguard to keeping a narrow focus and that my analysis proved to support my claims.